08 August 2011

Magpie Tales-Yes

Summer Evening, Edward Hopper, 1947

walking home
lights of the city behind them
leaves rustle with the wind
locusts hum
her sandals clicking, clacking
as the moon plays hide and seek
with the clouds
heat lightening flashes
She jumps
He moves closer
She walks faster
Her words "It's late"
Lost in the distant rumble
Of thunder
Ozone and old spice
Follows her
The porch light a beacon
A bedroom light flickers on
He reaches for her hand
"Could I see you again?"
His words floating loudly
Through the suddenly still air
A bedroom light flickers off
She leans into the darkness
Towards him
Feeling his smile
As he brushes her cheek
With his lips

C.M. Jackson 2011

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Brian Miller said...

smiles...ozone and old spice...and i am glad she said yes...this has a great feel to it...

Brandee Shafer said...

Nicely done.

C.M. Jackson said...

Brian--me too! you have a wonderfule day!

C.M. Jackson said...


Thanks for the kind words-c

Mama Zen said...

I love how you created a bit of suspense. I wasn't sure that she was going to say yes!

cosmos cami said...

This was so charming and I loved the holding back of it, keeping it a simple beginning and leaving the future unknown.
I loved the answer lost in the rumble of thunder part.
Such a great poem.

Pat @ Mille Fiori Favoriti said...

This was wonderful, CM. You captured the essence of Hopper's romantic painting with your words.

Stafford Ray said...

This line brought a smile: "A bedroom light flickers on". The message from the unseen chaperone!

Berowne said...

Nicely written -- well done...

Lolamouse said...

I remember the smell of Old Spice. This piece sets a great mood. Brings me back to summer evenings in adolescence.

Lyn said...

This has the beauty of truth..not a false move within it..tender..

Erratic Thoughts said...

I liked everything about your piece...but the 'Yes' did it for me...I'm a sucker for happy stories...
Thanks for sharing this...

Doctor FTSE said...

What a lovely end to her/his day, beautifully caught in your lines.

C.M. Jackson said...

Thank you all for your kind words--Tess inspires with her Magpies and Hopper is one of my favorite painters..c

Anna @ waysidewordgarden said...

Lovely tale, and I like the suspense until the end!

Helen said...

Oh how this takes me back ... to all those nights my dad would not go to sleep until I was safe inside our home ... turning the light on and off was my signal to say goodbye to whoever had walked me home! Young love .........

Tess Kincaid said...

I love summer sounds like sandals clacking, flip-flops flipping.


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